Could you take a look at the first part of my story. I hope to convert it into a graphic novel and although it is written in prose I have tried to write it in such a way that it would be easy to convert.
I don't have an account with the service that holds your story, so I couldn't view what you have. You are welcome to send a text file to woodruffdale@gmail.com and I'll take a look. As far as writing in a style that can be used in comics I would recommend that you look into scripting your story instead of using prose. Your artist is going to want to get some good direction from you and this will be best done through scripting (and perhaps layout sketches).
I'm currently using Zhura.com in order to write my scripts. They have templates specifically for comic book writers and also have options to keep your scripts private. If you like you can feel free to add me there my user name is dalewoodruff